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Hemanth
Desanike Pedda Bewarse
Username: Hemanth
Post Number: 8201
Registered: 03-2004
Posted From: 63.110.106.226
| | Posted on Friday, September 23, 2005 - 3:24 pm: |    |
book thesaka camera pettinappudu venaka music chithram bhalaree vichithram lo naresh panty ni choyinchinappudu jamba, heey jambhaa, jamaku jama jambhaa ani vasthundi, aa range lo undali.  |
Smart
Vooriki Bewarse
Username: Smart
Post Number: 4636
Registered: 03-2004
Posted From: 207.199.2.34
| | Posted on Friday, September 23, 2005 - 3:22 pm: | |
camera work naaku vadileyyi. iraga deesta
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Hemanth
Desanike Pedda Bewarse
Username: Hemanth
Post Number: 8200
Registered: 03-2004
Posted From: 63.110.106.226
| | Posted on Friday, September 23, 2005 - 3:17 pm: | |
pettedham mama. |
Smart
Vooriki Bewarse
Username: Smart
Post Number: 4634
Registered: 03-2004
Posted From: 207.199.2.34
| | Posted on Friday, September 23, 2005 - 3:15 pm: | |
hemu,
nee story lo langa etti books tiyyadam kuda manchi romantic ga picturize cheddam, emantavu?
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Hemanth
Desanike Pedda Bewarse
Username: Hemanth
Post Number: 8199
Registered: 03-2004
Posted From: 63.110.106.226
| | Posted on Friday, September 23, 2005 - 3:01 pm: | |
ala ummestham/uchapotham chesthee andulo vallu bayataki vastham anedi Tamil lo bagane untundemo kani telugu lo kastam mama. |
Hemanth
Desanike Pedda Bewarse
Username: Hemanth
Post Number: 8198
Registered: 03-2004
Posted From: 63.110.106.226
| | Posted on Friday, September 23, 2005 - 2:58 pm: | |
2nd scene lo vadu podalo thala petti Anybody there Echooo ane dialog pettu mama. |
Himababu
Pilla Bewarse
Username: Himababu
Post Number: 9
Registered: 09-2005
Posted From: 202.101.173.68
| | Posted on Friday, September 23, 2005 - 2:55 pm: | |
SCENE 2 maatram baavundi!!! |
Hemanth
Desanike Pedda Bewarse
Username: Hemanth
Post Number: 8197
Registered: 03-2004
Posted From: 63.110.106.226
| | Posted on Friday, September 23, 2005 - 2:55 pm: | |
>>Shots of them talking, smiling, the heroine hitting the guy after laughing out loudly will be shown. - SCENE END -
idi comedy scene ayipothundi mama frank ga, chaa antaru janalu background score sarigga lekapothe kanaka. |
Himababu
Pilla Bewarse
Username: Himababu
Post Number: 8
Registered: 09-2005
Posted From: 202.101.173.68
| | Posted on Friday, September 23, 2005 - 2:53 pm: | |
baalevu |
Hemanth
Desanike Pedda Bewarse
Username: Hemanth
Post Number: 8196
Registered: 03-2004
Posted From: 63.110.106.226
| | Posted on Friday, September 23, 2005 - 2:53 pm: | |
inthaki 2nd scene lo vadu oosthada poda meeda ki, romantic scene lo adi konchem asahyam ga untundemo mama, leka naku nee english ardam kaleda??? |
Truecolours
Desanike Pedda Bewarse
Username: Truecolours
Post Number: 8826
Registered: 11-2004
Posted From: 69.91.121.146
| | Posted on Friday, September 23, 2005 - 2:37 pm: | |
>>>But mitta madhyanam, intha baaga ready ayyi ekkadiki vellagaladu. Doctor appointment? Cousin's birthday lunch? We will decide..
sanjeevayya park ki
heroine kosam busstop ki |
Hemanth
Desanike Pedda Bewarse
Username: Hemanth
Post Number: 8193
Registered: 03-2004
Posted From: 63.110.106.226
| | Posted on Friday, September 23, 2005 - 2:37 pm: | |
ekkadaki vellanavsaram ledu mama, neat ga ready ayi unte dress padaithe sorry cheptharu evaraina, aa dialog avasaram ledu. |
Hemanth
Desanike Pedda Bewarse
Username: Hemanth
Post Number: 8192
Registered: 03-2004
Posted From: 63.110.106.226
| | Posted on Friday, September 23, 2005 - 2:36 pm: | |
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Powerpk
Pilla Bewarse
Username: Powerpk
Post Number: 36
Registered: 03-2004
Posted From: 202.159.251.232
| | Posted on Friday, September 23, 2005 - 2:35 pm: | |
Actual ga nuvvu cheppindi correct eh.. He cannot go to interview.. Aa point nannu kottindi.. But mitta madhyanam, intha baaga ready ayyi ekkadiki vellagaladu. Doctor appointment? Cousin's birthday lunch? We will decide..
Mama, nuvvu cheppina scene baane undi kaani.. Adi pedite EVV cinema aipothadi babai.. |
Hemanth
Desanike Pedda Bewarse
Username: Hemanth
Post Number: 8191
Registered: 03-2004
Posted From: 63.110.106.226
| | Posted on Friday, September 23, 2005 - 2:34 pm: | |
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Truecolours
Desanike Pedda Bewarse
Username: Truecolours
Post Number: 8823
Registered: 11-2004
Posted From: 69.91.121.146
| | Posted on Friday, September 23, 2005 - 2:33 pm: | |
nee abba rey  |
Hemanth
Desanike Pedda Bewarse
Username: Hemanth
Post Number: 8188
Registered: 03-2004
Posted From: 63.110.106.226
| | Posted on Friday, September 23, 2005 - 2:30 pm: | |
1st scene lo college lo chaduvuthunnaodu interview ki veluthunnadu ani cheptanni marchu mama, lekapothe final year chaduvuthunte campus vachinda anela undali, avanni alochinchalsina avsaram kanna, you can edit that dialog.
Good scenes mama. anyway nuvvu romantic scene cheppav, nenu danni konchem comedy ga chestha.
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Heroin kukka ni choosi freeze ayipoyi untundi, inthalo hero Orange biscuit ni rendu ga chesi kukka meeda ki vesthadu, appudu aa biscuit velli aame skirt meeda, aa place lo athukkupothundi, appudu kukka kallu choyisthundi camera, next biscuit unna place. next kukka face, againa biscuit unna place. kukka okka sariga ookuthundi aa biscuit ni andukovataniki heroin meeda ki, cut chesthee.... |
Powerpk
Pilla Bewarse
Username: Powerpk
Post Number: 35
Registered: 03-2004
Posted From: 202.159.251.232
| | Posted on Friday, September 23, 2005 - 2:11 pm: | |
hi friends. I'm back on da DBs after a long time. I posted a few scenes on the DBs long back and got a good response, but that dint materialize into a film. I was an amateur then. But now I have matured a bit, but not much though ;). I am working a small love story.
Kindly read the "individual" scenes and gimme your HONEST feedback.. I will explain the storyline some time later..
The scenes are pretty long, but PLS PLS PLS read them and give your genuine feedback..
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SCENE 1 :
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The “Love Guru” of the college , a senior is busy giving dating tips to juniors on how to hook up a date with the chicks of their class. He promises to give our hero the “tip of the century” which was rarely used and always successful. Well, it would cost. The charge – A pack of Marlboro cigarettes and pack of condoms. On getting them, he begins, “There are two ways you go about to make a women fall in your laps. One, you try to charm her and win her admiration which is the hardest way. The second is, you generate some sympathy for yourself. The feeling of the sympathy can easily be turned into love if worked about properly.” The hero nods his head, bows and takes his blessing. The Guru, gives him his ashirvaadam (blessing).
Hero plans to invoke sympathy for himself from the heroine. But how does he do that? He should first know more about the girl to know, what evokes her sympathy. Even to proceed, he needs to know more about her. So, he is also curious to know what she is talking with her friends, so he can know something about her. He observes the bench in the college open space where she regularly sits with her friends and chit-chats.
First, he tries going and standing beside them and trying to listen to what they say. Though he listens to them, he pretends to act as if he doesn’t. Noticing, that he is able to hear what the speak, they shoo him away. Plan failed! Hero punches his fist into his palm. Shit!!! Snaps fingers, plan ready!! Next day, before college opens for the day, hero and his gang comes to the college. They install a small secret mic into the bushes beside the bench to tap into what the girls are speaking. During the interval, the girl and her friend come around and sit on the bench. The hero, himself plugs mic into the ear and listens to what they speak. He listens to them for some time. But its the usual everyday stuff. Suddenly, he overhears that heroine is scared of dogs. Snaps his fingers, plan ready!
The next day, after the college he waits for the heroine to come out. There she comes. After waving a good-bye and blowing kisses in the air to her friends, she walks away from the college towards the road. The hero with a superb, white party shirt stands behind the heroine with a glass of Miranda in his hands. His best friend from the opposite direction is bringing the most frightening looking large, black dog with scary yellow teeth. Seeing the dog from the distance, the heroine already keeps a panicky face. The hero squats down and starts moving forward along with the heroine. He waves to the dog from a distance with a biscuit in his hand.. Typically like how one does to a dog, “umcchh.. umm.. umcch..” Seeing this, the dog starts moving towards the heroine, while her panic grows. She stops as the dog is almost near her legs. The hero throws the biscuit just beside her legs. The dog moves rigorously, trying to get the biscuit. The hero now get up and yells “bow” (very naturally) scaring her the hell out of her! In the fright of the moment, she turns back and hardly nudges him. He pours the Miranda over all himself, as if she pushed it and it slipped over him. He yells, “Oh, shit.”, “Shit man, I am going for an important interview. My white shirt, such a big stain.. My God!” Very tensely, the heroine says in a tense tone, gasping in between, “I’m Sorry.” “I am very sorry. I dint intend to do so. The dog was coming, I’m I’m scared of dogs.” She tries cleaning his shirt up with her hand kerchief. The girl touches the guy’s shirt while cleaning. Sensing opportunity, he holds her hand gently and pulls it down. The guy says, “Its of no use. That wont help. This requires hard cleaning. No problem, I will take care of that.” He pauses, and now in a cool tone says, “Look lady, that’s totally OK, coz I know you dint do it on intent. I will take care of that.” As he walks away, the “sorrys” continue. He says, “Yeah OK” and moves away.
Also – I am working on the second “goof up” set up by the hero. After that incident, the heroine apologizes and says “sorry” even more. That time, he consoles her, “Yeah. Its all right. I agree. I am not saying you’re doin it on purpose. I don’t read between the lines. It’s a pure conincidence.”
He also sketches plans for the third goof-up and this time, after the usual showering of sorrys, he pretends to break down and in a moist tone (as if he is about to cry), he says, “Its OK. All the women in the world do this to me. Now I know you did this on purpose. You looked down upon me, just because I don’t look good. I don’t blame you – its me who has got a bad face that provokes women.” She tries saying something inbetween, he doesn’t give her a chance. He turns his face away from her and goes on, “My God! Forget being loved by a woman, I have never even had a coffee with a good looking chic.”
The heroine, trying to console him says, “Hey!!! Who said you don’t look good. Ofcourse you do. Trust me you do.” Hero says, consoling himself, “Oh yeah? Then why don’t you come out for a coffee with me.” She agrees, atleast to come out of the mess. There he asks her to tell the truth, swearing to God, “Tell me, did you tell that I look good just because I was upset and was about to break down or I do I really look good. Okay, if not good am I atleast date-able?” Then in much gentler voice, she says (nodding her head), in a romantic way, “Yeah. You very much look good.” – SCENE END -
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SCENE 2 :
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Hero and best friend (or girlfriend) walking in Lover’s Park (Necklace Road). The hero tells the heroine, that it’s a romantic place where many lovers hang around. She looks around and find none. She says, “Where I cant see anyone.” He says, “Wait, I will show you.” He gathers some flum up his throat and spits it into one of the bushes beside the walking path. Suddenly, two lovers (a young guy and girl) rise from the bush with a irritated expression. The man yelling, “Yevadra vaadu?” Hero waves out to him and says, “Sorry brotheru, choosukoledu.” He turns to the heroine and says, “Chooseva. Chaala mandi unnaru ani cheppena.” The heroine, with a disgusting expression says, “Chee, ilanti chotuku teeskoccheva nannu.” Hero, smiles reassuringly and tells, “Ilanti chotuku teesukocchina, manam alanti panulu cheyyakarledu. Happy ga chettu needa kinda kurchoni matladu kovacchu.” Heroine also give a light smile (chiru navvu) and both sit beneath a large shady tree. Shots of them talking, smiling, the heroine hitting the guy after laughing out loudly will be shown. - SCENE END -
The whole of scene two takes place in less than minute and a decently quick pace.. Now - PRAISES AND BRICKBATS plsss...
Yours - POWERPK
powerpk "at" india.com |
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